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He was holding my hand.

I could still remember the first time he had done so. That time, I could tell by his trembling fingers that he was nervous. I could tell by his cold, clammy hands -- that he was afraid, and perhaps cautious.

But not anymore.

I could not tell anymore.

As he was holding on to my hand, this minute, this second, I could no longer sense what he was feeling. His hands no longer shook, and was no longer wrapped in a welcoming layer of warm sweat. Or rather, this was not even holding hands at all, unless placing his palm against mine counts.

"Okay, what?" I gave in with a teary voice.

He and I both knew for some reason, that he wanted me to remember this moment as he slipped his fingers between mine, and squeezed my palm. The faint squeeze he gave felt like a heavy stab to my chest. He embraced me, and held me there, fingers still entwined.

It was dark and misty out in the neighborhood as it was night. The streets were quiet and lonesome -- not even the sound of leaves rustling bothered me, though the chilly wind violently pierced through my face.

He held me in his arms tightly, I felt as if I were about to suffocate as my tears hung out the rim of my eyes.

Normally, I am able to guess what he is thinking the moment I meet his gaze. But this time, it took me some effort to do so -- he kept avoiding my glances. By the time I finally caught his sight, I was able to confirm my conjectures. I understood what he wanted, and he knew I wasn't ready to hear it.

He let go of me and freed my hand, leaving a safe three-feet distance between us.

"Don't hold back." I forced a smile.

He hesitated.

Staring down at the cement sidewalk, he swung his shoulders back and forth, taking so many deep breaths, I lost count.

Finally, he lifted his head slightly and peaked at me with such an adorable look, I almost could not restrain myself from embracing him.

He took one last, deep breath.

"Will you marry me?"

Once again, for the millionth time that night, I felt like my heart was racing with time.

A sudden burst of complicated feelings of joy, excitement, and commitment painted its canvas in my head. My tears uncontrollably poured down my face flooding every possible pore on my bright pink cheeks.

"I will no longer just hold your hands. I will no longer be nervous and hesitate over my choices. I will not let go. I will not regret." He knelt down on one knee after a long pause. "Please let me be the one to take on your future."

I wasn't ready for this. I knew I wasn't. I held both hands to my face and let the unstoppable tears overcome my excitement.

This moment, the turning stage of my life, I will never forget. And if possible, I hope I can hold on to this moment forever.

~ Fin.
I wrote this at school. NO IDEA where the inspiration came from. :P

Enjoy!

Please give me some feedback on the story plot! :tighthug:
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:iconsohle1:
Sohle1 Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2011  Hobbyist Artist
thats sweet! :)
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:iconanniecheng09:
anniecheng09 Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2011  Student Writer
Thank you!
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Sohle1 Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2011  Hobbyist Artist
your welcome! keep smiling! :)
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:iconfeatherdream:
Featherdream Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2011  Student General Artist
Wow...thats...pretty...amazing....
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:iconanniecheng09:
anniecheng09 Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2011  Student Writer
Thank you! ^^
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:iconfeatherdream:
Featherdream Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2011  Student General Artist
Welcome :meow: Your lucky to have such a talent :P I don't :D
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:iconanniecheng09:
anniecheng09 Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2011  Student Writer
Awww, don't say that!

Talent comes from hard work! :pat:
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:iconfeatherdream:
Featherdream Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2011  Student General Artist
Lolz I know but...I try hard, and I just..can't write :D
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:iconanniecheng09:
anniecheng09 Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2011  Student Writer
Aww... I'm sure there's something you're really good at, right!? :D
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:iconfeatherdream:
Featherdream Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2011  Student General Artist
Well, So far, I haven't found it yet lolz :D
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:iconanniecheng09:
anniecheng09 Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2011  Student Writer
You will! :D
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kittykatrocks12 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
OMG this is amazing
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:iconanniecheng09:
anniecheng09 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2011  Student Writer
Thank you! :glomp:
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:iconkittykatrocks12:
kittykatrocks12 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
welcome :hug:
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silverwind017 Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2011
This is honestly one of the best pieces of writing I have ever read.
It flows so beautifully and every word spoke to me like as if my heart has waited for it.
I'll be honest; I've been looking for a poem like this for a long time.
Maybe this is why I loved it so much.
Anyways, wonderful job. I'm going to feature this in :iconclean-writer-reviews: Hope you don't mind.
And i hope you get a Critique too. I would be interested to know what you got :)
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anniecheng09 Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2011  Student Writer
Awww, thank you... I'm truly, and I mean REALLY, amazed that someone would love it so much! :tighthug:
Thank you so, so much! & I don't mind you featuring it! In fact, I'd like to thank you for that! :glomp:
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silverwind017 Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2011
Aww... :huggle: No thanks needed my friend :)
It's an honor to have your writing in the group :worship: :w00t: :boogie:
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anniecheng09 Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2011  Student Writer
Awww, I feel so honored... Thank you (again)! :glomp:
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nickibluis Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2011
Found your story on #TheOriginalWriters

:bulletblack: Setting the first line apart for the rest of the text is a very effective opener. Well done :)
:bulletblack: [As he was holding on to my hand, this minute, this second, I could no longer sense what he was feeling.] “This” is a present tense demonstrative pronoun. Use “that” instead.
:bulletblack: The cat image is quite random. Why would anyone expect to see a dancing cat?
:bulletblack: [My tears, uncontrollably, poured down my face; flooding every possible pore on my cheeks. ] None of the extra punctuation is necessary. I would removed the 2 commas and the semi-colon.

Overall I think it was a good one-shot or vignette. There really isn't a plot of which to speak, other than a woman telling the story of how she got engaged. I felt it got a bit repetitive at parts, and the “nervous hands” imagery lost its effectiveness. However it was a still a sweet piece.

Best,
Nicki BluIs
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anniecheng09 Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2011  Student Writer
> Hmm... May you explain to me the difference between this and that? I tend to get confused. >_<
> Cats prowl at night? ;) (not to mention, black kitties)
> I'll edit that sentence. ("My tears...")
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nickibluis Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2011
This and that are demonstrative pronouns that denote proximity in space or time. "This" means close, or in the present. "That" means far away, in the past, or in the future. I hope that makes sense.

-Nicki BluIs
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anniecheng09 Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2011  Student Writer
Hmmmm... okay, thank you!
I think I get it. :tighthug:
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SesashaDrago Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2010
Is it bad that I thought for a split second that this had something to do with "twilight"? *laughs* I thought it was sweet, though.
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anniecheng09 Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2010  Student Writer
Ha.
HELL NO.
AM NO TWILIGHT FAN. LMFAO. ^^;

But, thank you! :love:
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SesashaDrago Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2011
THANK YOU!!
Twilight is an insult to REAL vampires (just my opinion).
And you're welcome.
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:iconanniecheng09:
anniecheng09 Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2011  Student Writer
Haha. Anyhow, I'm just not interested in Twilight. XD
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SesashaDrago Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2011
I just don't like it because the story line sucks and I'm a classic vampire fan. *laugh*
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anniecheng09 Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2011  Student Writer
Ahaha. I'm a vampire fan too! High five. XD
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:iconsesashadrago:
SesashaDrago Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2011
Cool. Have you heard of the Vampire Chronicles by Anne Rice or the Vladimir Todd series?
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:iconanniecheng09:
anniecheng09 Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2011  Student Writer
Ahehe, no. x]
I don't read a lot!

Did you like that series? :D
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AgentBabycakes Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Awwww!! It's sweet!
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anniecheng09 Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2010  Student Writer
:cuddle:
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DJChocolate-Lover Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2010  Student General Artist
taking so much deep breaths,
taking so many deep breaths,

This is a really good piece of writing.
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anniecheng09 Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2010  Student Writer
Ha... thanks for emphasizing. :dummy:

& Thank you! I really appreciate it. :tighthug:
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aerissed22 Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010
i didn't expect the story would turn that way. very good twist.
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:iconanniecheng09:
anniecheng09 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2010  Student Writer
Thank you! :hug:
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forWinds Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
i too was caught off guard by the twist! wonderfully done! :)
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:iconanniecheng09:
anniecheng09 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2010  Student Writer
Thank you! :tighthug:
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Anavushirak Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010
wow.

Um... I did that nearly die thing I do when one of my friends kiss their partner, when he asked her to marry him.

But great job.
I think it's good that he was willing t commit. :D lolz, don't know anything about this kind of stuff so there isn't much more I can say ^^;
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:iconanniecheng09:
anniecheng09 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2010  Student Writer
Ahaha. It's okay. :hug:

Thank you for reading! :pat:
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:iconanavushirak:
Anavushirak Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2010
No problem :glomp:
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helenpaige1 Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010
Love it! So sweet!
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:iconanniecheng09:
anniecheng09 Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010  Student Writer
Thank you :tighthug:
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:iconpurplepumpkin94:
purplepumpkin94 Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010
It's so beautiful!!! T_T
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:iconanniecheng09:
anniecheng09 Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010  Student Writer
tyvm. :pat:
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signed-silence Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
Lovely piece. It's so sweet. :love:
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anniecheng09 Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2010  Student Writer
:tighthug: tyvm :D
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PhsycoTatie Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2010  Student Traditional Artist
This is very good
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:iconanniecheng09:
anniecheng09 Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2010  Student Writer
Thank you :tighthug:
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jadiepopzz Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2010  Student Traditional Artist
incredible!!! talk about suspense then a shockingly happy ending:) i loved it!!!!
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